An idea for a short tragic movie

An idea for a short tragic movie

February 10, 2016 9:30 am

Ta post je v angleščini. Slovenski prevod je na tej povezavi: Ideja za kratek tragičen film.

With this idea I wanted to explore how difficult it is to follow a story through a single viewing angle and how difficult it is to arouse emotions while reading it. Did I succeed?

 

An idea for a short tragic movie

Part 1

1.1 – street in a more quiet part of town, side parking, city block
The girl in late twenties with a mutt on a leash are walking down the sidewalk, they cross a one-way street to a parked car. An old one. Just before she would unlock the car door, she sees a white envelop on the windshield. She shudders, takes the envelop, opens it and takes a folded paper out. We can’t see the content. A grimace distorts her face, bursts into tears and the dog starts to bark. She looks in the direction from where she came and sees a man that is walking furiously towards her. We see him only from the back, he has a hood over his head. While walking he stretches out his hand and we see he is holding a pistol. He starts firing towards the girl. He hits her multiple times, we see blood and she collapses.

DARKNESS, a text appears on the screen: “They say your whole life flashes before your eyes when you die”

Part 2

All the scenes from now on are in black and white, we are looking through the eyes of the girl, the only thing that we hear is music, no other sounds or vocals.

2.1 – first steps
She opens her eyes, she grabs the coffee table with her baby hands, strugglingly stands up, looks to the left where her mother and father are, looks back at the table, lets go of it firstly with one hand, then with the other, looks back at her parents, takes one step and falls.
She crawls back to the table, grabs it once more, gets up, looks at her parents and awkwardly walks for two meters until she reaches mothers embrace. Mother looks happy, father proud. We can barely see a bruise on the mother’s hand. The girl closes her eyes.

2.2 – primary school
She opens her eyes, she sees a group of her classmates who laugh at her and point towards her. She looks down and sees her torn skirt. One of her female classmates comes towards her and holds her. The girl closes her eyes.

2.3 – home – secondary school
She opens her eyes, she sees his drunken father how he is screaming at her mother. He is slapping and hitting her. Mother is trying to defend herself but doesn’t have a chance. She fearfully glances at her daughter. The girl collapses in the corner of the room and watches. Her father turns to her, takes his belt out of his trousers and starts walking towards her. A small dog jumps in between them and starts barking at her father. Just before the girl closes her eyes, we see the father swing his leg towards the dog.

2.4 – bus, high school
She opens her eyes, she sees she is sitting on the bus that stops. She gets up, goes to the exit, walks down the stairs out of the bus and sees her mother on the platform with sunglasses who ineffectively hide a black eye. She smiles at the girl and spreads her arms wanting a hug. The girl runs to her, hugs her and closes her eyes.

2.5. – party
She opens her eyes, she is dancing at a party. The lightshow is on, a group of more or less same age people are dancing around her. A guy walks towards her, he wants to dance with her. She looks to her friend (the one that comforted her in primary school), she smiles and hints the girl that he doesn’t look so bad and that she can take the chance. They start to dance. He looks a bit clumsy, but he probably drank a bit too much. We can see the chemistry between the girl and the guy. The girl closes her eyes.

2.6 – romance no.1 – lake Bled, Slovenia
She opens her eyes, she is in the middle of a lake on a boat with the guy. She is holding a champagne glass, the guy is smiling at her, they toast with the drink. The girl closes her eyes.

2.7 – romance no.2 – Moorish castle, Tabernas, Spain
She opens her eyes, she sees a beautiful view with sunset over the horizon. When she looks on the left, she sees the castle walls and when she looks back to the right, she sees the guy who is watching her full of love. He gets on his knees and takes a small box out of his pocket. When he opens the box towards her, we can see an engagement ring. The girl bursts into tears, nods and closes her eyes.

Part 3

3.1 – their flat
She opens her eyes, she holds a tray with food and walks from the kitchen to the living room where a bunch of guy’s friends watch sports TV with him. She puts the full tray on the table, which is between the guys and the TV. Her fiancé puts a grimace on his face while she is blocking the view. Others try to cheer and look at the TV from different angels not even acknowledging her. The girl closes her eyes.

3.2 – their flat
She opens her eyes, she is in front of the dining table with two empty cups with saucers and her fiancé waiting for her on the other side of the table. She is holding a full coffee pot and while pouring into one cup her hands shivers a bit and consequently spills a few drops. We can see a bruise on one of her hands. When she looks at her fiancé, he yells at her. The girl closes her eyes.

3.3 – their flat
She opens her eyes, she is in the flat looking at the front door while they are opened. Her fiancé comes in and she pulls her hand from behind and shows him the pregnancy test. He is a bit shocked, reaches for the tester, looks at it, looks at her, smiles at her and hugs her. The girl closes her eyes.

3.4 – their flat
She opens her eyes, she is walking up the stairs, opens the front door to their flat and sees her fiancé how he is behind the dining table and while she is coming inside, he stands up, picks a beautiful bouquet of flowers from the table, throws it on the floor and stamps it. He jumps to her, showing her a greeting card with a heart and non-recognisable signature. She extends her arms, she wants to explain, but he doesn’t listen. He slaps her so hard she loses balance and drops with her stomach on a closet for shoes. For a moment all is blurry because of the pain, she grabs the closet with one hand, looks down at her 8-months-baby belly and reaches bellow the skirt with the other arm. After a moment, we see this hand full of blood. The girl closes her eyes.

3.5 – hospital
She opens her eyes, she is lying, seeing lights that are moving on the ceiling. On her left and right are the hospital staff, they are running beside her bed. She looks down to her big belly, it is covered with hospital’s blanket and she sees a few drops of blood. She can also see her fiancé running behind her belly at a safe distance. The girl closes her eyes.

3.6 – hospital
She opens her eyes, looks around and sees she is in the birth room. Above her are lights, on one side is a doctor with a bloody scalpel and when she looks at her belly, they are just taking the baby out of her. The baby is motionless. She looks at the doctor, he is using his stethoscope to check if the baby has a pulse. After a few seconds, he closes his eyes and shakes his head towards the midwife. The girl closes her teary eyes.

3.7 – their flat
She opens her eyes, she sees her fiancé in the living room. He is crying, begging her. She shakes her head, looks at her right hand, takes the engagement ring from her finger and throws it at him. She then turns around, takes her suitcases and goes out of the flat. The girl closes her eyes.

3.8 – parents’ house
She opens her eyes, she is crying in the mother’s embracement. Her mother is crying also, her father has flushed cheeks, he looks drunk and is cursing. The girl closes her eyes.

3.9 – police
She opens her eyes, she is in an office at the police station. In front of her is a police officer who is writing something on the paper. When she looks out of the office window she sees her ex fiancé how is in handcuffs and led by two police officers through the hallway. The girl closes her eyes.

3.10 – parents’ house
She opens her eyes, she is in her childhood room, looking at her photo album. She looks at one photo with the whole family and she is petting the dog they had when she was younger. After some moments, she looks at the door to the room and it opens. Her mother is showing the way for the girl’s childhood friend (the same one) who comes in with a small dog in hands. With an awkward smile she gives this dog to the girl. The girl hugs the dog and closes her eyes.

Part 4

4.1 – work
She opens her eyes, she is in her cubicle, looking at her phone. Seven missed calls from “Murderer”. She also looks at her messages, and goes through the last couple of days of messages from the sender “Murderer”. It looks like at least 20 messages have been sent in one day and a lot more from previous days. The girl closes her eyes.

4.2 – work
She opens her eyes, she is in a meeting room full of co-workers. It is an oval table with everybody in suits. Around the room is a glass wall that is separating it from other hallways and offices. When she looks at the glass doors, she sees Murdered who just ran to the door and wants to open it. Behind him is a security guard who caught up on him and prevents him to open the door to the meeting room. When Murderer tries to punch him, the guard skilfully evades and throws the attacker to the floor and prevents him to stand back up while talking into the walkie talkie. The girl closes her eyes.

4.3 – parents’ house
She opens her eyes, she is in her childhood room sitting in the corner with knees to her ears and petting her dog. During her petting, the dog raises its head and starts looking at the window and barking. When the girl follows its view, she sees Murderer at the window. She gets up and runs to the door. The girl closes her eyes.

Part 5

5.1 – street
She opens her eyes, she is walking down the street with her dog on the leash. She crosses a one-way street to a parked car. Just before she would unlock the car door, she sees a white envelop on the windshield. She shudders, takes the envelop, opens it and takes a folded paper out. These words are on the paper: “If I can’t have you, nobody will!”. She bursts into tears and looks at the dog that starts to bark. She looks in the direction of the dog barking and sees Murderer walking furiously towards her, his face distorted with rage. While walking he stretches out his hand and she sees he is holding a pistol. He starts firing towards her. He hits her at least 10 times. She collapses. Before she closes her eyes, she sees the dog in front of her and at the last moment the murderer’s shoes (they are the same as when they were at the lake and by the castle). The girl closes her eyes for the last time.

 

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